In my Wikipedia article I chose to write about the private dorm in Madison that does not get talked about much when referring to dormitories in Madison. The article is about Statesider which is the dorm that I lived in Freshman year. I discussed the different things Statesider offers including ammenities and other features. I am hoping that I posted the Wikipedia article in the right place so I am going to meet with the teacher after class to see if this is correct but until then here is article and the link:
Statesider is a Private dorm style living environment located at 505 N. Francis Madison, WI 53703. Statesider is a privately owned dorm that is not affiliated with the University. Statesider offers all utilities included within its Rent including Cable TV, local phone line and high speed internet in the rooms. Statesider also offers roommate matching for its residence who hail from all over the country. On every floor there is a T.V. and study room that makes it a nice place to hang out with your fellow residence. Statesider has a twenty four hour computer Lab with two printers available for residence use. Statesider offers a fitness room and a stand-up tanning bed that offers a great chance for its residence to be on top of their physical game. Statesiders large dining room with big T.V.’s make for a great eating experience. Within the rooms, each one offers its resident a private bathroom for the upmost privacy. Statesider offers a variety of room styles from a single, double and two types of four person common areas. Statesider offers an unbelievable city view from a variety of its floors that entails the capitol as well as the lake. Statesider holds approximately 215 residence which makes for a great intimate environment. Statesider has a prime time location in downtown Madison located near restaurants, bars and shops. It is right near campus and is the perfect location for any first year or any student in Madison.
Source: http://www.statesidermadison.com/Apartments/module/printable_brochure/company_property%5Bid%5D/11967/
The Wiki Article
16 years ago
1 comment:
If you have, or plan to post this on Wikipedia, it could use some work first or it'll get deleted.
First of all, you need to lose the promotional tone of phrases like "nice place to hang out" or "great intimate environment". Not only are these uninformative, but they aren't in line with Wikipedia's policy of neutral point of view. Instead of saying how Statesider "offers" each and every item, why not sum up the elements in a single sentence along the lines of "Statesider's facilities include […]"
Second, you need to establish notability. How is Statesider special? Is there anything that truly distinguishes it from any of the thousands of dormitory environments worldwide? If you can't address this issue, the article shouldn't exist. Good proof that it exists and is notable might be found in most third-party media; in particular, check the historical news. The source you've provided at the bottom is insufficient and inappropriate because it is self-published: it should be used for supporting information at most.
The writing could use a little touching up (such as not starting every sentence with "Statesider […]" and using proper spelling and grammar), but those are side issues: other Wikipedians can correct that if the article is eventually posted.
I hope this constructive criticism helps. :)
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